And Now It Begins: What Revision Really Means

"The first draft reveals the art, revision reveals the artist."

-- Michael Lee

So bearing my bound draft like a trophy, I embarked on my writers' retreat yesterday...and met my maker.

I looked myself in the mirror (my writing, all 212 single-spaced pages and 105,000 + words), and while I didn't groan, I had to wrestle with my work style and try something new.

The challenge is overcoming my nitpicking tendencies. At this stage of revision, I have to think globally. I need to look for trends and themes; I have to follow narrative structure and the plot's obstacles and conflicts; I have to see if the crisis is truly a crisis. I have to see if characters who are introduced are fully realized, or are just landscape or even annoyances to the reader.

I'm not a global thinker when it comes to my writing. My strongest urge is to start slashing on page 1--finding synonyms, removing phrases, and tweaking little, little things. And before I know it, two hours have passed and I've made it to, wow, page 5?

This kind of work takes forever.

Reading globally is a way for an author to mimic what actual readers do. Our readers don't carry microscopes or red pens (though I will tell you that this biography of Michael Jackson has so many proofreading errors, I've been tempted to pull out the pen). Reading globally helps you see if a reader wants to turn the page because the plot momentum is strong. It helps you see if the character who started one way on page 5 has evolved naturally and believably by page 55.

So, here's how I handled my anal self yesterday: along with the draft I brought a legal pad and pen, and I told myself with great resolution that I would read and write nothing on the manuscript. I would only write general concerns on the legal pad. I would tell myself, Don't worry, you'll get to nitpick next round, I promise.

This resolution is to protect the work and me. The last novel became mired in the nitpicking, and I will not go there again.

So, I made it to page 93 this way, with only some lapses. If I got a date blatantly wrong, I had to write on the manuscript. I'd also neglected to number my pages, so that took some minutes getting straight, because when I found a problem, I had to mark where it occurred on my legal pad. And sometimes, there would be a line of purple prose so brilliantly purple, shiny like an eggplant, that I had to squash it, right there. Then I'd catch myself and put the cigarette/drink, I mean, pen, back on the counter. Back away from the pen....

I kept telling myself as the urge strengthened to rip up pages with my pen, Trust. Trust you'll remember what's wrong when you get back to editing.

The other caution was, You can nitpick it to death right now, but what if you end up removing whole chapters and writing new sections? What good will this nitpicking do then?

But last night, I couldn't resist. I spent about an hour slashing. Old habits, yup. But today, back to global reading. I need to read the whole novel by sundown.

Then, I've got a week to enter these edits, which limits how much slashing I can do, and from what little I've done, I'm thinking I can remove several pages. Then it will be camera ready for real readers. And that will be due to a combination of global and local revision.

It's on!

Writing Prompts: Please note that writing prompts should always be pursued in emotionally-safe environments with the supervision of someone who interested in encouraging good writing, self-awareness, and reflection. A wonderful resource is Pat Schneider’s Writing Alone and With Others.

© Lyn Hawks. Writing prompts for one-time classroom use only and not for publication in any form elsewhere without permission of this author.

Elementary Prompts:

-- Finish this sentence with 25 more words: My very worst habit is... Then finish this sentence with 25 more words: I can try to change this habit by...
-- Imagine you are in a space station floating above Earth. You look down, and you see -- what? Oh, wow, you have to write what's happening! Tell us what you see that you can only see from the space station!
-- Now tell the same story as someone who is standing on Earth. How do you find out about what's happening? How is what you see different--or very different--from what is seen from the space station?
-- What is the thing about your writing you wish you could change, right now? What part of your writing do you not want to change? Why?
-- Name two people besides a teacher whom you think you can show your writing, and they will give you positive and helpful comments. Who do you trust to show your writing, and why? What do they tell you?
-- Finish this story: I had just written a great story. People wanted to read it because...

Secondary & Adult Prompts:

-- Finish this sentence with 25 more words: My very worst habit is... Then finish this sentence with 25 more words: I can try to change this habit by...
-- Imagine you are in a space station floating above Earth. You have the global view of Earth. You look down, and you see -- what? Tell us what you see that you can only see from the space station. Use as much sensory description as you can.
-- Now tell the same story as someone who is standing on Earth. How do you find out about what's happening? How is what you see different--or very different--from what is seen from the space station?
-- What is the thing about your writing you wish you could change, right now? What part of your writing do you not want to change? Why?
-- Your writing has global changes you can make and local changes you can make. Global changes involve ideas and structure (the thesis or argument, the organization, the characters), and local changes involve small edits (spelling, grammar, diction). Talk about one global change you would like to make and one local change.
-- You have just finished a piece of writing you are proud of. You have assembled a group of people you can trust to give you a fair and honest critique -- a balance of compliments and criticisms. Write the dialogue that ensues.
-- Finish this story: I had just written a powerful tale. The buzz was everywhere: read this story because...

I Did It

"I lived to write, and wrote to live."

-- Samuel Rogers

Draft #2 of my latest novel is done.

I wrote hot, and I wrote fast. For six months I wrote daily, and I printed out what I wrote and revised that. When I was too tired to create anew, I entered those edits. I also began some research and the findings fueled changes. I composed while I drove; ideas came to me constantly in the car, so a notepad was a tremendous help at red lights.

Now the draft is bound, courtesy of Kinko's. I take it out today to a retreat space and I'll read it like I just bought it. This experience will tell me what I need to change before I hand it off to a writing partner (we're swapping novels) and a few who've offered to take a gander.

More drafts will unfold in the next months. I am on a relentless pursuit that is somewhat different from my last novel. That manuscript ballooned at one point to 1200 pages, then slimmed to 800, then got hacked to 400-something. I blogged about my intent to only add back in what was necessary, but after so many years and too much attachment, I no longer had an idea of what was necessary. So I shelved it after 15 years of relationship. There was no drama at this break-up; sometimes you know when a union is broken. Especially when you meet somebody new.

This relationship with this book has been very Johnny Cash-Loretta Lynn, we-got-married-in-a-fever, and I believe authors such as Stephen King would approve. Write the durn thing as fast as you can, letting plot and momentum drive the process. I did indeed. King also cautions, Don't make life serve your writing. This is said by a guy who writes every day save his birthday and Fourth of July.

Life has somewhat served the writing of this lately. There are sacrifices of time for family, friends, and whatever it is the rest of you do on weekends. When you have a day job, it isn't enough to write an hour or less a day. The weekend must be offered up, too.

Aside from the intensity, there's little romance to the story of how I came to 400 bound pages. I applied seat of the pants to seat of the chair daily, and I printed out faithfully, and I carried the manuscript around like a wedding ring. So in a sense, it was a fly-by-night marriage, but the union is monogamous and faithful. I tried to sustain some short story revision and creation while the novel was being written, but that's fallen by the wayside now. I just can't see other people; it's against my faith.

This morning, I know one thing, and it's not just thanks to caffeine: I did it, and now, a new phase of the union begins. Revise, revise, revise.

Send me whatever they send couples on their six-month anniversary and I'll send you photos of the celebration.

Writing Prompts: Please note that writing prompts should always be pursued in emotionally-safe environments with the supervision of someone who interested in encouraging good writing, self-awareness, and reflection. A wonderful resource is Pat Schneider’s Writing Alone and With Others.

© Lyn Hawks. Writing prompts for one-time classroom use only and not for publication in any form elsewhere without permission of this author.

Elementary Prompts:

-- What is something you've done you are proud of? It does not have to be the biggest thing you've ever done. It could be that you made someone smile; that you helped someone who needed help; that you did something for the first time ever. Think about a time you made a new friend, learned to tie your shoe, rode a bike, sang in front of people, or drew a picture. Write about any of those times and how it felt.
-- Have you ever met someone and right away knew this person would be a great, close friend? Write a list of all the things about this person that told you s/he would be your good friend.
-- Imagine you have a time machine and you have just traveled back in history or forward in time. You land in a place you've only heard of in books. What place is it? You stumble on a magical book that will unlock the mystery of where you are and what you must do next. Write the first page of that book.
-- Draw the cover of a book you would like to read. Then, write the paragraph that explains what this book is all about.
-- Finish this sentence with 25 more words: The best thing I've ever done is...

Secondary & Adult Prompts:

-- Sometimes it's the little things that matter most. Think of a time that gives you fond memories because you accomplished something you hadn't before--something small. It could be that you made someone smile or offered help; it could be that you came to a realization you'd never had before; it could be fixing something that was a mystery to you before. What happened? Relive that moment by writing about your experience.
-- There is a phrase for a person with whom you just click: "kindred spirit." Have you ever met a person and knew immediately that this individual was destined to be a close friend? Write a description of this person and your encounter. Then, if you wish, write a list of "how to know" someone is a kindred spirit.
-- Imagine you have a time machine and you have just traveled back in history or forward in time. You land in a place you've only heard of in books. What place is it? You stumble on a magical book that will unlock the mystery of where you are and what you must do next. Write the first page of that book.
-- Finish this sentence with 100 more words: The best thing I've ever done is...